Reviewer: RainLady (Signed) · Date: 08 Jun 2007 08:24 pm · On: Chapter 1When The Wind Blows

Very nice start to something I hope you write more of (Don't leave us hanging!).  I enjoyed it a lot.  Your writing is fluid and reads so easy.  I liked the way Remus slipped back and forth between thinking about Tonks and a memory of his mother from his childhood- makes you really sense how on the edge of death he might be- with the things he truly loves, past and present, floating through his mind.  Also really enjoyed the Remus/Greyback interaction.  I think Greyback is an interesting character with a lot of possibility.  And the Remus/Tonks ship fan in me loved the “Let her go, Fenrir, this is just between you and me."  This story sucked me in immediately at the start with the quick introduction of a tense situation...that just kept building and pulling me along- wonderful- something I am trying to learn to do with my own writing.  I was however a bit tripped up over the sentence where Remus stops to point his wand and dress himself...the story was getting really tense and moving fast at that point, and that sentence seemed like it slowed down your wonderful building climatic end to the scene...maybe a bit too much detail/info that interrupted the good momentum of the moment.  While reading I was thinking- you don't have time to stop and get dressed!  Just get on the unicorn and run away before you both die!!  Anyway, just a thought.  Hope I haven't rambled too much.  I really liked this chapter and hope you keep going with the story- I'll be watching for it!  Thank you for sharing your work with me!