Reviewer: RainLady (Signed) · Date: 15 Oct 2007 08:45 pm · On: Homeward Bound

I have enjoyed your piece so far.  I felt like this chapter was much stronger than the first- nice job :)  Especially liked the scene with Draco making one last wish with a coin in the fountain.  Was well written and touching.  I hope you continue to post new chapters.  Will watch for updates.   RainLady

Reviewer: RainLady (Signed) · Date: 15 Oct 2007 08:28 pm · On: Life's Little Differences

I like that this is set several years in the future after the last book- gives you the flexibility to take this in whatever direction you want.  Very Fun.  And Ron a professional Quidditch player- he would be so proud that's how things turned out ;)  I could really appreciate this chapter setting up for Hermione's new future but her break-up with Ron felt a little forced.    Otherwise enjoyed reading your work very much.  On to the next chapter :)   

Reviewer: Pip (Signed) · Date: 10 Oct 2007 12:45 pm · On: Homeward Bound

I really really like this, the voices have settled now, largely, and I like the mix of existing and new characters. More please.

Reviewer: Pip (Signed) · Date: 10 Oct 2007 12:36 pm · On: Life's Little Differences

orking good start to a story, love the concept of Hermione and Ginnie as the Quidditch version of WAGS, love the set up, love the relationship, love the thought patterns and the flashbacks. The only downside I can find is that you haven't really nailed the speech patterns, particularly Ron's, and you have let American slang creep in. Please go back to the books and fix those voices in your head, it's such a little thing to mar a fantastic start to a story.

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